This is overall one of my favourites, as
1) You have such a great style of writing, everything makes sense
2) The main characters life is alot like mine, (her mother yells at her for small reasons, her father is gone)
3) Your physical description of the girl is exactly like me in every way (yes, even the lack of chest)
4) I believe I have schizophrenia myself, I've been told I have little idiosyncracies like that of a person with... mehr anzeigen
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looking forward to reading more of your work!
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...the first comment is so unnecessary...
Anyway, i can clearly tell that you improved but somehow i personally find it a bit sad, that you shortened the prolouge that much. There were some very lovely lines in the old version like the one that she loved running because it was the closest she could get to flying and all this. These really described her personality very well and a few more words wont do any harm i guess,... mehr anzeigen
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I see why you put this, but it is still in writing. I'm no where near done yet.
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OMG! what is this? how can a book have only 12 pages? GOSH!
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