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im glad you like it! this weekend ill go through the book and look for some grammar errors :) thank you for the input :) how far are you?

Hi Michelle,
First Love your name. Second started reading your book and from what I've read. I'm enjoying it. Spelling and grammar need work, but the story is there. Good job!

Thank you! I'm really glad to hear :)

I am really enjoying this!!

can't wait for more!!!

I'm so glad you like it. I've been pretty busy lately but I am definately going to correct and more onto it! But it makes me happy to hear you are enjoying my book so much :)

Sincerely,
Abby Moran (Michelle Ying)

I think you need to work on spelling and grammar, but I LOVED the book!!! It was really suspenseful and poignant. Are you going to add more to it?

Change the sentence "I knew I wanted revenge just like his father but at the same time it was almost like peeking into a strangers death and that just isn't how I'd like things to be."
to:
"I knew I wanted revenge just like his father did, but at the same time I thought it would almost be like peeking into a stranger's death, which isn't how I'd like things to be."
Remember the apostrophe in stranger's!

Oh, and I wanted to let you know, you should edit this sentence on the first page:
"A young child was murdered under the bridge and their body was left to float upon the water."
It's a very captivating sentence, but there's a grammar mistake. It's one child, so it should say "his body." If you don't want to give away the gender just yet, say "the body."
Keep writing! I like the book!

I've been actually waiting for some critisism so that I can see what I can fix. Thank You for taking your time to read my story and find things for me to correct. :)

Sincerely,
Abby Moran (Michelle Ying)