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judycolella

As requested, I began to read "Faormac." Your premise is interesting, but I could only get as far as page 6. Too many pronouns and no names made it almost impossible after a while to figure out who was doing what, POV switches making it hard to know who was being referenced, too many personifications and unnecessary descriptions bogging it down enough that I had to go back and re-read several of the sections. Your first... mehr anzeigen

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J. B. Jones

Way cool, and just what the doctor ordered, Judy. Thank you! I think you nailed it with the comment about theatricality.

The intention was to give each character an air of 'in-definition' until another character fleshed them out. Likewise, the cascade of pronouns was meant to... mehr anzeigen

judycolella

You're quite welcome! I appreciate your explanation, and have a feeling what you come up with is going to be epic. ')

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judycolella

Hi, Jeff!

Sounds like you're ready for this new adventure. It took me a long time to try my hand at publishing my stories, and like you, I'd read more books than I can count over the years. In fact, that's something I'm trying to convey to the younger writers on this site - when they ask for suggestions on improving their skills, I tell them to start reading, keep reading, choose only the great authors to read, and do so with... mehr anzeigen

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