Hi Cody. I'm enjoying your book so far. The idea is great, and I love how you started the book with an assassination. That said, you seem to enjoy meshing dialogue tags with actions ie: 'Mr. Que yells as he points at him'. This leads to a rather tedious structure of story, and causes a reader to lose interest. Try a little more sentence variation in length and how they start, and I believe that will improve your writing... mehr anzeigen
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Hi Cody! :)
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haha :3 ill try my best to make it as good as i can.
You better! No friend of mine can go shaming dragons. Even if the end up being the bad guys, make them the "good" kind of bad guys. Like say, Maleficent! :)
haha going to have like a short wing, uneven horns and his powers are toasting bread.
Writing as much as I can. But I hope Yall love my book.
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hey! :D Nice to meet you.