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“It is very intentionally working to trigger victim-blaming and stereotypes
and misconceptions about sexual assault,” she said. “You must be interested in
sexual behavior just based on how you’re dressed and drinking.”

I invite you to Google ""drunk collage girls"" or ""drunk collage selfies"".

“If she wanted to do that so bad, put a nail in the coffin, wouldn’t she have
given you a more coherent story?” he asked the jury.

Most liars know to fabricate as little as possible. Police interrogation work
to get the subject to lie asap. Once you prove they have lied you them in the
palm of your hand.

There is no excuse for bullying let alone sexual assault, but people who do
not drive drunk do not get arrested of crash their cars. If that makes any
sense to you.

Why dosen't this article specify the time between the incident and the
reporting to the police? How she lost her friends, her cell phone, had never
been drunk before, was so drunk she was repeatedly barfing.

None of this mitigates how wrong rape is, but is does ask questions.

Did her friends testify? Why did she not call them as she realized what bad
shape she was in. How many readers have ever been so drunk that you would not
realize your clothes were being removed and someone was having sex with you?
I've had a number of drinks a few times in my youth and never came close.

Sorry I just have a difficult time understanding the circumstances repeated
over and over again on campuses across the nation.

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This is a good start, Velvet.

Thank you for reading my book! I was so excited to read the email you sent. I should have made it clear that Where do we go from here Is the second part of Implausible Provision. I do need to work on my spelling and I have a little trouble with tenses. If you don’t mind; read my first book then tell me what you think? I greatly appreciate it!!! The reason I ask is because I have seven parts to this story. I wrote it in my senior year of high school.

Where Do I Go From Here By Tessa Brown

We all want people to read our work, and with some polishing you can attract some new readers.

I think you might want to slow down and explain what really happened. Was Sade kidnapped? If so it would be good to let us read about that.

Why is Sade so taken with Damien? It seems unlikely she would fall for a guy who kidnapped her, unless she is so lonely and feels like she doesn’t fit in anywhere. I think I’d like to know who she is, I’m not talking about what she looks like physically, but what she feels, and what she wants from life. Is it possible she has never really had a boyfriend before?

Be careful you switch tenses more than once.
You need to go over your work and check your spelling. In the first paragraph the last word kidnap, it should be kidnapping. I know I can rewrite and still miss spelling mistakes.
Lastly did you check your word count? Flash fiction is between 300 and 1000 words. Keep writing.

I am also a mother of three. :)

IP is short for implausible provision. Ths is the second part of the ook, a little shorter than the first; keep a looout for the rest!!!