BookRix

I love how people on here and critique this story about it's writing but so far it seems 99.9% of the stories here are crappy at POV, plot, dialogue, description, past-tense/future-tense, and much more. I think this is slightly better than the things I've read on here, at least there's actual effort. Literally saw a story where the author used text-faces while writing and even broke the fourth wall to explain what was happening like we couldn't piece it together ourselves. I'll tell you what, this site gives the author who wrote My Immortal a run for their money.

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I read the first two pages and lost interest because the language is so bad.

Help i dont know what's going on with you pov is messed up

I love it please continue the story.

The story line is good...it's just that the pov's are all mixed up and I don't understand it....continue your story but fix it a lil

it very confusing is it the girls or guys POV

i really dont understand this book

this book is extremely confusing. The grammar is awful , I have barely any idea what is happening. You book has the potential to do well however it needs some heavy editing. Also Adding a description would help as well.

Im Confused Idk Who Says What But It Seems Interesting