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READ ON OR DIE TONIGHT AT 10:35 P.M 9 years ago a person named Jerry got dared to sleep in a house that was believed haunted. The next day his friends waited for him outside the house...... They had to go inside and search for him. They went through every room exept the attic. He wasn't supposed to sleep there. He was supposed to sleep in the living room they went to the attic
. They saw Jerry's corpse and they just left because they were scared. But that night they all died because of their friend. He killed them for making him sleep in that house if you don't send this to 11 comments you will die tonight by Jerry. Example 1: A man named Stewart read this and didn't believe it. He shut off his computer and went through his day. That night while he was in bed he heard something outside of his door. He got up to look. And now he's dead. Example 2: a girl named Haley read this in the morning and she got scared but she didn't send it. She wanted to now if it was true. She went to school (She was only 13 years old) and that night she died. If you don't post this on 11 comments Jerry will 'visit' you his isn't fake. Apperently if you copy and past this to ten comments in the next ten minuets you will have the best day of your life tomorrow. You will either get kissed or asked out, if you brake this chain you will see a little dead girl in your room tonight. In the next 53 minuets someone will say I love you or I'm sorry

READ ON OR DIE TONIGHT AT 10:35 P.M 9 years ago a person named Jerry got dared to sleep in a house that was believed haunted. The next day his friends waited for him outside the house...... They had to go inside and search for him. They went through every room exept the attic. He wasn't supposed to sleep there. He was supposed to sleep in the living room they went to the attic
. They saw Jerry's corpse and they just left because they were scared. But that night they all died because of their friend. He killed them for making him sleep in that house if you don't send this to 11 comments you will die tonight by Jerry. Example 1: A man named Stewart read this and didn't believe it. He shut off his computer and went through his day. That night while he was in bed he heard something outside of his door. He got up to look. And now he's dead. Example 2: a girl named Haley read this in the morning and she got scared but she didn't send it. She wanted to now if it was true. She went to school (She was only 13 years old) and that night she died. If you don't post this on 11 comments Jerry will 'visit' you his isn't fake. Apperently if you copy and past this to ten comments in the next ten minuets you will have the best day of your life tomorrow. You will either get kissed or asked out, if you brake this chain you will see a little dead girl in your room tonight. In the next 53 minuets someone will say I love you or I'm sorry

I'm sorry but I couldn't get past the first two pages. The story doesn't suck me in at all and there's a serious need of punctuation. Nearly all your sentences are fragment sentences.

this book sucks

best book ever man!!!let me know if you write more!!!

best book ever man!!!let me know if you write more!!!

best book ever man!!!let me know if you write more!!!

best book ever man!!!let me know if you write more!!!

best book ever man!!!let me know if you write more!!!

well i read this book and i kept thinking about what i like to write. this book is the best horror book that i have read! i love to write books of horror but they never turn out like this one!